Just wrote this for my son. Will read it tomorrow to him when he wakes up.
A Matter of Mater
One day t’was too hot,
To go out to play.
So my Mama brought
A little rabbit to stay.
The rabbit was white
With small bits of black;
Wasn’t it a sight
Running on the track?
The track of the trains,
Of Wilson and Koko,
Thomas and James,
Get ready set GO!
The track was an eight
For the trains to run
But rabbit went straight
What a lot of fun!
And then Mama asked,
“What will you name him?”
“Mater!” I stated
“Is the best name for him.”
My Mama asked why,
I said “There’s no doubt,
The reason is simply
His teeth are sticking out!”
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Not sure if you welcome suggestion or not, but as I was reading, the last line seemed like it would ‘fit’ better if it was simply. “His teeth stick out!”
Just a suggestion, more for they syllables and rhythm of the poem… which of course will only work if you read the poem in the same rhythm I do, LOL. 🙂 I loved it! (And ‘Mater is my favorite ‘Car’, too!)
Actually I quoted what my son says about Mater “His teeth are sticking out!”. And of course I’m open to suggestion, how else will I improve? 🙂
🙂